Appendices

10.1 The graph of proportion of Life Satisfaction and People’s age

10.2 The results of Relationships Indicators Survey in Australia on the reasons of people’s marriage

Adil, good work! These are merely cosmetic changes suggested. What I do recommend, is that you take a thorough “walk” through your paper with the Table of Learning Objectives at hand and make sure that every objective is covered in your paper.

I hope your curiosity was satisfied by your research. It appears as if romantic love is not dead, yet!

Ms Charlene

[WU1]Explore may be a better word here?

[WU2]This sentence contradicts itself. What I think you are trying to say, is “Despite the delusion that love and marriage are the same, they are often not and could even be mutually exclusive.

[WU3]More academic ‘the twenty first century”

[WU4]It is acceptable because it is basic background information. You could look for more scientific descriptions or definition in law books or from legal websites about marriage.

[WU5]A settlement agreement in case of a divorce.

[WU6]Add “for mere financial “

[WU7]Avow sounds unnatural. ‘..many people admit to that without the slightest hint of shame”.

[WU8]Remember articles – The first and The second

[WU9]Majority OR Most of the …

[WU10]Define the books e.g. fictional? Further on you mention that “only printed and well-known works were used” – it seems contradictory.

[WU11]It is important to make sure that your research paper addresses all the required learning objectives (Table was given at the start of the term). Technical terms are very important. Here it seems like a good opportunity to discuss “cause and correlation”.

[WU12]Suggestion: change that to..a reality

[WU13]plural

[WU14]not the right word. “People get married with the firm intention of the relationship being mutually beneficial, whether it is of financial, emotion or social nature.”

[WU15]Mention that it could therefore not be representative of the population and therefore does not allow generalization.

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[WU17]Correct according to APA